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Author's Note: I'll come back and edit this later, but basically this story is based off of the story of Anansi and Nothing. Anansi meets Nothing, a rich man, on the road one day and they go off to town to find a wife. Shenanigans ensue. I really will come back and edit this, but I wanted to get it posted....
Source: West African Folktales by William H. Barker and Cecilia Sinclair, with drawings by Cecilia Sinclair (1917).
In the late morning, during the second month of my stay in
Ghana, I knocked on the door of the woman Abena, whom I had met only the night
before. The morning was clear and cool, and a breeze ruffled my skirt as I
stood there on the threshold, only my racing heart betraying my impatience. Behind
me, the city rumbled and screeched along its daily path through the streets.
She answered the door with a child on her hip and worry in
the lines of her face. “Oh!” she said. “The anthropologist. I did not expect
you this morning. Maybe tomorrow morning?”
My hopes sank. “Tomorrow” often meant “some indefinite time
in the future”, and I only had a few more weeks before I needed to start
writing my report. I could feel the hole lurking in my argument as I
spoke. I’d attempted to chase down several of the people who told me “tomorrow”
before, and they kept pushing me off. I’d sworn that I wouldn’t be pushed off
today. “Of course I could come back tomorrow,” I said. “But if even if you only
have a few minutes, I would be happy to hear what you have time to tell me.
Another child came to her side. “My friend,” she said, again
“perhaps now is not the best time?”
I took a deep breath. My heart was racing very, very fast—I didn’t
want to mess this up, but I’d been trying to get somebody to tell me this story
for a month now—to no avail. [] Had seemed perfectly willing to tell me last
night. What had changed her mind? “Of course,” I heard myself saying, like I
had so many times before. “I’ll come back tomorrow. I—“
Right at that moment, something crashed in the street behind
me. A man had knocked over the trash can that stood by the road as he walked
by. When I turned back to look at Abena, the lines in her face had deepened—not
with worry, but with something I could only describe as annoyance. She looked
at me, and then back at the man, who hadn’t even stopped to pick up the trash
can but who was making his way down the street with his shoulders thrown back. She
shifted the child on her hip.
“My friend,” she said, “you said you wished to hear a story.
Please come in, and I will tell you one.”
When we had settled down at the worn table in the kitchen, the
dim light from the window washing the wood and the cup of tea she had made for
me gold and silver, she took a deep breath. “You said you wished to hear a
story,” she said. “I cannot tell you the one you asked for, but I will tell you
one about a man who was unkind to his wife, and how it fared for him.
“But—“ I said.
She cut me off. “My friend, listen to me. I will tell you
this story, or you can go and ask someone else for the one you keep asking for.
Will you listen to mine? Or will you leave now?”
I shoved down my impatience. Nobody ever got anywhere, in
fieldwork, by being impatient. “I’m sorry,” I said. “I’m listening. Please tell
your story.”
For a moment, there was silence while she stared at the
table and stirred her tea. I thought she wasn’t going to say anything. Then, slowly,
she began her tale. “This is the story about a man who was unkind to his wife,”
she repeated, “and another man, named Nothing, who was kind to his. It goes
like this: one day, a businessman who was down on his luck met another
businessman—his neighbor—on the road to the city. The first businessman was
poor, so he wore ragged clothes, while his neighbor wore very fine ones, but
they got to talking and found that they were both going to the city to look for
a wife. They decided to go together.”
Somewhere in the house, something banged and a child
shrieked. Abena glanced worriedly towards the door, but relaxed when she heard
the glee in the child’s voice.
I shifted in my chair. “What happened then?” I asked.
“The poor businessman tricked the rich businessman into trading
clothes with him. He said that he wanted to feel rich for a day—and of course,
being rich, the other businessman understood. But the poor businessman tricked
the rich one, and didn’t give his clothes back before they reached the town.
When the got to the square where all the girls were, the girls only interested
in the poor businessman. They didn’t know he was poor, because of his clothes.
“The rich businessman was named Nothing. He didn’t get any
attention, because he was wearing the ragged clothes. Only one girl wanted to
speak with him, but she was the most beautiful of them all, and the most kind.
The rest of them had no use for him.
“The poor businessman negotiated a marriage with the kindest
girl’s best friend, who was the second most beautiful of all the girls in the
square. He kept the rich businessman’s clothes, so that she had no idea he had
no money, or that he was a trickster, before the wedding. So she married him.”
She stopped, and gazed steadily at me for a few moments. “You
should not be tricked by poor businessman in rich clothes,” she said, finally. “That
is my story, my friend.”
First of all, your descriptors are so good in this story! I was able to imagine what was going on right away because of the different descriptive words you used! I like that Abena told the story about Nothing, and how he tricks girls into marrying him because they thought he had a lot of money, then the girl still had to marry him because of the negotiation, even though he was actually poor. I also like that you ended it with the life lesson that appearances aren't a good indicator of what a person is really like. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow great writing! It was very descriptive and suspenseful. I enjoyed reading it and how you tied the lesson in at the end. Honestly, you left me wanting more. Now I am curious what the story was that the reporter originally wanted! Overall great work, I loved reading it!
ReplyDeleteThis was a great story! Very suspenseful! I like the level of detail you put into each scene of this story, it sets it all up for the reader well. I can imagine the exact scene where this story is being told. I wish this story continued, I feel like it had an abrupt ending. But that also added to the suspense. I would maybe consider breaking up your paragraphs a little more. Overall great job!
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